In-clasee Writing #5 Part II

To integrates my paper, the most important thing is to make each body paragraph connects to the main thesis. General information and specific elaborations, make my points clear and easy to understand.

Safiya Asked:
-What’s your essay about?
Basically it’s about Internet change human’s life.

-How do you plan to integrates your introduction to your essay.
My introduction concerns about people become more familiar with Avatar sites, YouTube.

Yael Asked:
-What are your academic sources?
Most of them from websites, like google search.

-What are the ideas your pointing at?
The first body paragraph is giving some specific reasons to point out author’s unclear issues. Then elaborate my personal experiences about Avatar sites and YouTube.

-What message are you trying to send your essay?
Let readers recognize how Internet changes our life style.

In-class Writing #5

Sources for academic research paper

newspaper

Internet resources

magazine

encyclopedia

biography

Textbook

Journal

Media Irony: Has Apple Gone Too Far This Time?

We know Apple and Microsoft are always competing with each other but has Apple gone too far this time by mocking the new Windows Vista in these pictures.
From my understanding, there are lots of new things added in Vista already exist in Mac OX 10.4, is it MacroSoft copy some ideas from Apple? New Mac operate system coming soon, are they going to make fun again?

In-class Writing #4

Avatar sites become more popular because people like to communicate to each other.
The rate of high speed internet service grows dramatically during 5 years.
YouTube attract different age group of people.

Man with a guitar by Braque

Style: Cubism
Year: 1911
Museum: The Museum of Modern Art, New York
Original Size: 32 x 45.5 inch (81 x 116 cm)
Type: Oil on canvas art reproduction
Georges Braque, a French painter, collagist, draughtsman, printmaker and sculptor. His most important contribution to the history of art was his role in the development of what became known as Cubism. In this Braque’s work is intertwined with that of his collaborator Pablo Picasso, especially from 1908 to 1912. For a long time it was impossible to distinguish their respective contributions to Cubism, for example in the development of Collage, while Picasso’s fame and notoriety overshadowed the quiet life of Braque.

Random MySpace Profile

UNEMPLOYED SKELETOR

Strange MySpace site, a series of homemade videoes, pretty funny talk shows. He has good computer and animation skills. A lot of fans shown.

YouTube

smart test kid in class

Kill My Desktop

Evaluation

First of all, Safiya declares author’s main point, and she disagreed author’s assumption, which is saying that American tuned out the issues around them in exchange for a video camera and a whole lot of time on their hands. Then she gave some evident about Sony didn’t make enough PS3 last year. After that, she mentioned the Global warming, she though author gave the false statement because some people really try hard to prevent the environment (Oprah and Al Gore). Then she point out the issue that author said American do not seems to care about the war oversea. She gave the reason that most Americans want the troops back and they disagree with Bush Administration action, and also the public support for the war has decreased.
In my personal view, I think this is pretty good paper. She gave many arguments, but do not have a specific one though the whole essay. For each argument, she did provide evident to her option and these statements are clear, easy to understand. If she can make more elaborations about one issue and clear thesis, that paper will be great.
Safiya, she did the face book. She is freshman of Queens College. She loves playing soccer, studying and baking. She came from Trinidad and Tobago, so she loves Jazz, and R&B music. She posted her picture on her profile, and I think she is a pretty open person; even she is quiet in the class.

In Class Writing II

I think most people use Avatar page because they can easily contact with their friends and family members. They have control with their pages. Like most teenagers, they like to share things, like pictures, music, even included their feeling toward some events. Because Avatar pages become more popular, people choose to use it and they won’t get lost in the modern world. The advantage for Avatar page is make people more closely to know each other, give them more confident to talk what they like to say, it’s a good way for mental relaxed.

In Class Assignment 2

This music started off with a man's speaking, we don't really understand what he is saying. Following by that, is kind of scratchy sounds, likes broken mechine. Then there were lots of static music. After that, everything being quiet, music turn to normal, but still uncomfortable sounds, make people stressful.

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